You want to start your own small business. Write a letter to a bank requesting information about obtaining a business loan to finance your new company. In your letter, include the following information: what kind of business you want to start how much money you need the length of time over which you would expect to repay the money

I am writing
this
letter to request a bank loan for my
business
startup
. Well, my plan is to build a software house where we will be creating
a different websites
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and
an
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applications as per the client
business
and their requirement.
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my prime requirement is to purchase the furniture , hardware, and some IT equipment for
initial
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startup
. At
initial
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stages
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I need almost 1 million dollars for the whole
startup
including the 1 year building rental charges
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and employee salaries. As an entrepreneur and our
business
analysis, I believe the
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target would be perfectly fine for our
startup
,
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because we can easily cover at least half of our
startup
cost.
Furthermore
; regarding the loan return duration and
installment
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criteria, I’ll be comfortable for 2 years of duration on monthly
bases
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basis
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. Because according to best of my knowledge and expertise I think
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better to keep in mind the
business
fluctuations and losses as well.
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I'll
also
make insurance for my employee’s and
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business
’ which I believe is really important
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. Thanks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial forecast
  • cash flow analysis
  • target market
  • startup capital
  • business plan
  • profitability
  • repayment schedule
  • collateral
  • creditworthiness
  • entrepreneurial venture
  • capital expenditure
  • industry analysis
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