nowadays,many families move overseas for job opportunities. some people think this is beneficial for the children of the families,while others think children will find it difficult. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
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present era, it is a common trend for many families to seek employment opportunities in foreign countries.
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it is thought by some as being in the best interest of the youngsters in the family, others refute
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claims
it will be difficult for them. In my opinion, I agree with the former view,
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A proponent
The proponent
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trend claims that travelling is a form of education,
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, young children are given the opportunity to live and interact with others. In their new environment, they learn other people's culture,
language
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and tradition.
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skill would be impossible to acquire without their parent moving from their own country. A good illustration, in Nigeria, James Smith, the translator
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the president in a recent interview revealed that as a young child he lived abroad with his parent who travelled in search of better career opportunities,
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made it possible for him to learn different languages and culture. Today, he, being multilingual has an employment advantage. The opponent refutes
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claim; they believe it is difficult for youngsters to adapt to new environment because of
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the possible language barrier
possible language barriers
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barrier. Apparently, in a new place, they would be unable to communicate effectively, which could lead to social developmental problems and poor academic performance.
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, when children cannot relate with people around them, they become withdrawn and are unable to make friends, thereby leading to poor grades at school.
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, Stanley Brown, the France Ambassador to Nigeria, in a recent article claims that
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children poor
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children, poor
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performance at school was
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of his relocation to Nigeria. He attributed
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to difficulty the children encountered in understanding a new
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. Based on the aforementioned viewpoints, I opine that children benefit from their parent's travel to other countries for career opportunities because they are able to learn new languages and cultures, while others opine it is difficult for youngsters to adapt
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language
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differences
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difference
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