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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Climate change is an increasingly growing
issue
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 nowadays. While some argue that it is the responsibility of developed countries to combat
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, others are
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in
of
with
 the opinion that all ought to have equal ownership on
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 essay will discuss both the view and the reason why I believe that developed nations should take the lead.
One
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 the
one
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 hand, many are
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of
in
with
 the opinion that climate change is a global
issue
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 and everyone should fight together
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in
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 arena; be it a rich country or a poor
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. It is not the sole duty of developed nation to come up with solution since
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 is affecting the whole world. How much ever small
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 contributes, it will add up to the effort that others are making to tackle the detrimental situation that our earth is currently in.
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other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 believe that it is the responsibility of developed countries to take the lead since they don't have any other issues to handle unlike other small developing nations. Poor countries struggle to meet their basic
necesities
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessities
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their
in or at that place
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 is the limit to which they can contribute to a big global
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 like
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.
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, since rich nations contribute
more to pollution
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more pollution
 and gas emissions from various means, it does
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make
sence
a general conscious awareness
sense
since
 to take a
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firmer
 stand on
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 problem and thereby guiding and helping others to fight for
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 common
issue
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. Their technological advancements will definitely give them an edge over others. To conclude, all are equally responsible for the world as a whole and everyone should fight hard to save the earth. In my opinion, even though all countries have equal ownership
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of
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, being stable and wealthy makes
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developing
 nations the front runners and they should be the leaders.
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