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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its headoffice in another country. Write a letter to your manager in your letter 1.Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months 2. Say how your work could be done while you are away. 3. Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

#work #company #six #months #headoffice #country #manager #head #office
Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to request
for
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a transfer to the
headoffice
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head office
 in
UK
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the UK
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 for a period of six months. In line with the company's policy of a transfer to the
mainoffice
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main office
 after working for
5years
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 will love to
work
 at the
mainofficr
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main office
 for a different
work
 experience and it would
also
 be lovely for me to
work
 directly with the big bosses and get to learn from them and
also
 meet my other colleagues in the UK. I will
also
 love to learn about the life and culture of the new state. I know six months is a long time to be away from my present duty. I have successfully
being
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 able to train my assistant on the
nitty gritty
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 of the
work
 and
i
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 can assure you sir that the
work
 will go on regardless of my absence. I know there is usually a long waiting list but
i
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 will love sir if you can help me put in a good word with the CEO in order to
fasttrack
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fast track
fast-track
 the processing of the release form. Yours faithfully, Modupe Cole.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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