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many high-level positions in companies are filled by men even thogh the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female .companies should be allocate a certain percentage of these poistions

#positions #companies #men #thogh #workforce #countries #cent #percentage #poistions
With the achieve the
equally
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equality
 between men and women in some
companies
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companies'
company
 men still get the perks and positions whereas women do not!
However
, some believed
that that companies should
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that companies should
 not
distanguish
mark as different
distinguish
 between men and women it should give some of
this
 for females.
Moreover
, In my opinion I strongly agree with that and in
this
 essay I will discuss that.
Firstly there
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Firstly, there
 is no
dout
the state of being unsure of something
doubt
 that nowadays women become more
sucsseful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 than how they were,
furthermore they
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furthermore, they
 proved their qualifications in many filed of jobs, nobody can deny that women worth
pormotions
a message issued in behalf of some product or cause or idea or person or institution
promotions
 and perks more as many as men get because they work more and better and they do not have
absence
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an absence
 in their jobs like men.
Fot
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For
Fort
 example, according to a survey in an
Australia
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Australian
 company the management said women were
better but
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better, but
 to be honest when we want to
detrmine
establish after a calculation, investigation, experiment, survey, or study
determine
 a position men get it easily they look more
agreesive
having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends
aggressive
.
as
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As
 a
resault
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
result
results
,
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,
women do
better but
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better, but
 get less
this
 rule can
destoryed
make false by mutilation or addition; as of a message or story
distort
 their
carachters
an imaginary person represented in a work of fiction (play or film or story)
characters
character
character's
.
Secondly
,
it it
the thing named or in question
it
 is commonly believed that women are busier than men, they are responsible for taking care of
children
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child
children's
child's
 housing
besides
 having their
job
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jobs
,
on the other hand
 men just have to do his job
For
instance accordine
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instance, according
instance according
 to
delytime
, during an interview with a
business man
a person engaged in commercial or industrial business (especially an owner or executive)
businessman
, he said: we do not trust women they
are always have
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always have
are always having
have always had
 a lot of things to do it, they always confused
an
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a
nervious
easily agitated
nervous
. So men believed that
the
people in general
they
 have the
qulifications
an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something
qualifications
qualification
 and the
paitient
a person who requires medical care
patient
patients
 at work. To conclude
,
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,
I strongly agree with that women worth to achieve the
equally
Suggestion
equality
 with men, she has the right to be and get like men,
furthermore
 gender roles were in the
last
 decades we should forget it.
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