These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
People have different views related whether it
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for the children to immigrate with their families abroad. I believe it is beneficial for children to move
outhside
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
their
country
Use synonyms
. On one hand, there are many advantages for the children to move abroad.
Firtsly
Suggestion
Firstly
, they get access to quality education. The education in
developed
Suggestion
developing
country
Use synonyms
is far superior than that of the developing
country
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, in these countries they have better career opportunities in
comparison what they
Suggestion
comparison to what they
comparison with what they
may have in their home
country
Use synonyms
.
Moreover
Linking Words
, the children
gets
Suggestion
get
internationl
Suggestion
international
exposure where they
studies
Suggestion
study
with students from many other countries.
This
Linking Words
help
Suggestion
helps
them to learn multiple cultures and prepare them to excel in their jobs after completing their graduation.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, they live a
convinent
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
life in migrated
country
Use synonyms
. The developed nations have better infrastructure. People in developing
country
Use synonyms
spend more time in commuting same distance in comparison to developed
country
Use synonyms
. Some of the cities in
third
Linking Words
world countries have become unlivable due to increase in pollution levels.
For example
Linking Words
,
Delhi capital
Accept comma addition
Delhi, capital
of India, is one of the most polluted cities of the world and children over
their
in or at that place
there
suffer from numerous diseases due to inhaling of that air.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, children
also
Linking Words
encounter many difficulties, when they move to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
, they have
to start to all
Suggestion
to start all
over again and it is not easy for everyone.
Secondly
Linking Words
, they have to learn different languages. Learning language is not
everyone
Suggestion
everyone's
cup of tea and some of the student struggle lot with it. In conclusion, I strongly feel the advantages of moving out far outweigh disadvantages for the children.
Submitted by rahul78.bansal on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: