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The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show one government's spending on culture and education in 1995 and 2005 and the number of people participating in Arts events in the same years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A particular
authority’s
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investing
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into
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in
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 culture and teaching system in 1995 and 2005 and the
amount
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number
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 of people attending
in
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apply
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Artistic events in the identical years
were
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 indicated by the given diagrams.
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, as is illustrated by the charts, the governing body spend the most money on
musical
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the musical
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 domain and the least on literature during the period shown.
Initially
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, in 1995, the percentage that the government invested
into
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 visual arts
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were
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 twice as much as the literature, a decade later, there
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were
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 no distinction between these two figures. The statistics demonstrated that the monetary provision for
theater
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 was 1 out of 2 the
music’s
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music
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 in 1995,
however
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, it closed in approximate value in 2005. In the
second
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 place, the number of art
events’s
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events
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 participants in two given years
were
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was
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 slightly different. The most striking is the
quantity
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number
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 of people
joined
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who joined
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 visual arts
event
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events
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 marginally decreased whilst the
contributers
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contributors
 in
theater
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theatre
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, music and literature climbed up moderately.

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