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some people think that all university students should study whatever course they like, others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are arguments about freedom to choose the course of
study
 in a tertiary institution. While some individuals think it should be streamlined to
sciences
Suggestion
the sciences
 and its application, I believe that college students should be allowed to decide and
study
 the courses they prefer because it stimulates commitment. On one hand, some people are of the opinion that when choosing a course of
study
 students should choose subjects relating to technology because it is applied in most things in the world presently.
For instance
, the banking system,
telecommunication to
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telecommunication, to
 mention a few are innovations of applied science and taking subjects related to
this
 in college will aid
further
 understanding
and expertise application
Suggestion
and application expertise
.
On the other hand
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that scholars in higher institutions should be allowed to decide and choose courses that they are interested in and comfortable with as
this
 would allow for commitment and there would be
zeal
Suggestion
a zeal
 to complete the degree and even take more courses related to their choice.
For instance
, I had a friend in the university who studied civil engineering in
school but
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school, but
 on completion of his
degree he
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degree, he
 decided to be a writer and is doing really great as a prolific writer.
This
 shows that if undergraduates are forced to
study
 courses that they are not interested
in they may stop
Suggestion
they may stop
 after completion to delve into what they really prefer. To conclude, despite the debate about choosing science related courses due to advancement in technology in recent times, I am of the opinion that desire for a particular course is the driving force for performance and commitment in the studied discipline,
hence
 university students should be allowed to choose their preferred courses.
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