people doing dangerous sports activities like scuba diving and bungee jumping should be responsible for their own life and rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing that sports. Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years,
extreem
of the greatest possible degree or extent or intensity
extreme
sport has become increasingly popular among many people.
Despit
Suggestion
Despite
the thrill and
excitement
Accept comma addition
excitement, however
however
, these kind of activities can be dangerous and in severe cases may require the need of a professional expert team who
risk
their own lives in order to save those who got injured or lost.
This
paradox, in my opinion is immoral and people who engage in dangerous sports should not
risk
the lives of others. Pushing
owerselves
reflexive form of "us"
ourselves
to the limit gives us a feeling of
livliness
general activity and motion
liveliness
. A recent research released by the Hravard University has shown that
extreem
of the greatest possible degree or extent or intensity
extreme
sports cause the increased release of
serotonine
a neurotransmitter involved in e.g. sleep and depression and memory
serotonin
, a
potent
Suggestion
potential
transmitter leading to a higher feeling of happiness and excitement.
Also
, performing these activities
give
Suggestion
gives
many people the feeling they are fulfilling their dreams and make them feel like they are young again. Unfortunately, these exact feelings make them take uncalculated risks and lead to injuries and life threatening events. When sportsmen, after performing in a reckless activity, are injured a professional rescue team is required. In may cases, these brave men put their own lives at
risk
in order to save a person who could have
easly
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
avoided the situation.
This
is, in my opinion, completely immoral.
For example
, there is no reason for a
helikopter
an aircraft without wings that obtains its lift from the rotation of overhead blades
helicopter
crew to be at
risk
in order to save a climber who got lost on a mountain with no oxygen. People should be properly educated before engaging in the activity and should be fully aware of the possible consequences. Just as a
surgen
a physician who specializes in surgery
surgeon
do not
perofm
a distinctive odor that is pleasant
perfume
a surgery without practicing and studying, people should be prepared when performing an
extreem
of the greatest possible degree or extent or intensity
extreme
sport. In conclusion, I agree with the presented statement and think people should be fully responsible for the actions and not
risk
other
peopls
Suggestion
people's
peoples
peoples'
lives.
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