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rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #fees #employment #prospects #graduates #people #universities #arts #subjects #philosophy #history #offer #courses #chances
Students spend a great deal of time and money on tertiary study,
therefore
 vocational subjects would be a better investment in terms of immediate job opportunities.
However
,
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everyone has an aptitude
fordcience
, engineering or medicine
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 and there is a need for graduates with
expeertise
skillfulness by virtue of possessing special knowledge
expertise
 gained from arts courses. In subjects
such
 as philosophy
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,
 students learn a valuable set of skills.They become active thinkers who learn how to
slove
find the solution to (a problem or question) or understand the meaning of
solve
 problems, rather than passive learners who memorise facts and other people's ideas. Philosophy students become proficient at critical and moral thinking
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argumentation and debate. The ability to examine and analyse topical issues or challenge the status quo is very important. After all, someone needs to question the results or indeed the usefulness of scientific research, the politician's assertions, and historical events and assumptions in general. What is more
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saandals
disgraceful gossip about the private lives of other people
scandals
 in business and government
emphasise
to stress, single out as important
emphasizes
 the need
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appropriate to; intended for
for
 ethics in corporate and public domain.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • critical thinking
  • innovation
  • cultural heritage
  • market forces
  • employability
  • educational diversity
  • practical degree courses
  • adaptability
  • long-term effects
  • societal impact
  • cultural enrichment
  • job market trends
  • interdisciplinary approach
  • fostering creativity
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