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Some say that young and energetic employees are the more valuable for the company, others argue that older employees have more experience and knowledge. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and examples, based on you own experience.

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At present situation, employees
plays
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play
an
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a
 key role in the development of any organisation. Some prefer to have young, who are energetic and while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 go for
experience
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. Either of them have their own advantages and disadvantages, which we will discuss in the
later
referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)
latter
 part, based on my
experience
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. Coming to the young generation. Mainly, companies prefer to have them, because of their energy levels that they are going to show at
work
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.
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, Mr. Ramesh, who is fresher, used to show energy at
work
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, made us to
work
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 with more energy.
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This in
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This, in
 turn, result in
competion
a concluding action
completion
compression
 of our faster, than planned
time
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 frame.
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, They will come up with new innovative ideas, which is useful for the betterment of the company.
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, we are following the regular process in one situation, but
this
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 guy
twist
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twists
 the actual, by a bit made us to reach the target in efficient and
faster
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fastest
 way. Another, They cost less
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to
 an organisation. For a sample, For
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a
 payment of one
experience
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 resource, we can hire two junior persons.
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, They are dedicated and don't have other
avigation's
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
obligations
. To illustrate, they can spend more
time
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on
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at
work
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, if needed, unlike the others. Regarding the
experience
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 people.
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, These are talented and have good knowledge
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of
 the
owrk
activity directed toward making or doing something
work
.
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, Mr. Rath, who is senior, use to guide us, when we are
struck
caught or fixed
stuck
 at
work
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, with his knowledge.
Secondly
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, They can
tackel
accept as a challenge
tackle
take
 the things in
better way
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a better way
better ways
,
eventhough
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even though
 how
worst
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bad
 the situation is.
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, When there is case, where we are unable to complete the task in
time
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,
this
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 guy
convienced
persuaded of; very sure
convinced
convince
 our client and bought some
time
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 for us. In conclusion, to my opinion, based on the above examples,
combination
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the combination
a combination
 of both makes the perfect team. One with information and another with pace is perfect mixture to complete the task in efficient and
quickly
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quicker
.

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