These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Modern world today

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going abroad for better job and life is quite common.The argument that

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migration might be harmful for the

child

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in the family is a subject

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both supported and refuted many.In my

opinion I

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opinion, I

consider, the

child

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's problem related to settling in a new place would be temporary that can be effectively managed.

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some argue that when

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a father or mother; one who begets or one who gives birth to or nurtures and raises a child; a relative who plays the role of guardian

parents

move to a new

country

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which would be negatively

impacts

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impacted

on younger one in the family.

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, relocating can be

painfull

causing physical or psychological pain

painful

since they required to leave their friends and family members and when they reach

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the new atmosphere

they would find difficulty in adjusting with it.

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they would face

cultural

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culture

shock

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this

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could have serious impact on

child

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menta

involving the mind or an intellectual process

mental

and emotional growth and that would remain

life

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a life

long,

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(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with

according

to experts.

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evidence

make

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makes

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problems related to moving to another

country

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is obvious.

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others believe that difficulties related to migrating another

country

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for children can be minimal

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it brings more advantageous to the

child

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.The most obvious one could be high standards living and education

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which means children life would be secured by

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Additionally he

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could get international exposure and

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ability

to interact with multi culture society.Eventually

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the

child

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would become

global citizen

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global citizens

a global citizen

and highly

productive which

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productive, which

might be less happen if he

lived his native

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lived in his native

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Therefore supporters

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believe

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be the best

thing to happen any

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thing to happen to any

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thus

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feel that when a

child

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move abroad might feel some difficulty

initially

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but since the

child

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is a highly receptive

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he would easily

tackled

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tackle

the issue and move forward with a precision.So I believe and it is recommended to migrate to a developed

country

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for the sake children future. In summary

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both sides of

argument

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the argument

regarding how a

child

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effects

from

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migration have strong support and oppose.

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I support migration as it has many benefits to the

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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307 words

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