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Many people believe that today there is a general increase in anti-social behaviour and lack of respect for others. What might have caused this situarion? How to improve it?

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Along with the rapid development of technology, our community has constantly raised multiple serious issues, typically the acceleration in anti-social
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and lack of respect to others. Personally, I believe that there are several compelling reasons to
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 as well as suggest profound solutions to address those matters. One of the main reasons
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to
 anti_social act is
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advanced
 technology. Due to
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 an individual's
behaviour
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 is being ruined by mobiles and televisions as they have become easily accessible.
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, people tend to become selfish, and while seeking their pleasure through playing music or using mobile phones, they tend to forget the surrounding environment.
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, while using public transport, people talk over mobile phones in a loud voice, and they don't think of co-passengers who can be disturbed.
Public transport authority
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The public transport authority
Public transport authorities
 or the Government should implement some rules regarding the usage of electronic devices either by penalising them or
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 introducing a quite area for
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reserving
 passengers. Heavy penalties will force a person to change their
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. Another reason for anti_social
behaviour
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 is social media. People create groups on social media platforms and target the quietest member of a group in the form of bullying.
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, in what's up to the group, people share abusive messages without thinking about its consequences on other members. Media authority should take appropriate action to stop spreading chaos by blocking those people with usage of media. As there are various media platforms
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 as Facebook, Instagram and twitter and when a person gets blocked from one of the media platforms due to inappropriate act he might learn a lesson and be cautious of his action on other groups. In conclusion, to avoid future antisocial
behaviour
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 issues, the appropriate authority should step in either by implementing strict rules or penalising for the inappropriate act.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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