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The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.

The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar.
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The three pie charts compare the composition of four different meals, namely breakfast, dinner, lunch and snacks, in terms of three nutrients, namely
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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.
Overall
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, can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fats
is
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 prevalent during dinner, with slices respectively 43% and 37%.
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, the quantity of added
sugar
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 from
this
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 meal accounts for
the
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apply
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23%, nearly half of the same nutrient in snacks,
that is
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 42%.
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, the latter category is the one that contributes the less regarding
sodium
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, with
a
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apply
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14%,
same
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the same
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percentage
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 as breakfast.
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, the figures show that breakfast is the meal that gives
the
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 minor amount of each nutrient, with only the 14 % of
Sodium
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, and 16% in both saturated fats and added
sugar
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. Regarding lunch, it brings in a similar
percentage
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 of
sodium
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 and saturated fats, namely 29% and 26%, and a slightly less
percentage
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in
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of
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 added
sugar
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, exactly 19%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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