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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Using chemicals in
food
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 production and preservation has more disadvantages due to its effect on human
health but
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health, but
 there are some benefits derived from it. Admittedly, chemicals affect human health. If a body contains large amount of chemicals, the organs in the body are lessened which can cause diseases like heart problem, stomach ache and particularly cancers. In fact, it can even lead to death. Take
for instance
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, it was discovered in the year 2016 in Nigeria that some people eat beans and it lead to their death because of the chemical that was used to preserve the
food
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. That
year many
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year, many
 people avoid eating beans and till
date most
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date, most
 people are still scared of eating it.
On the other hand
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, chemicals are used to preserve
food
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 and to improve production. Companies sell products more easily because
chemicals
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the chemicals
 contained in the
food
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 help products look fresher, so consumers will be attracted to buy it.
Also
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,
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,
instant
food
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 will damage easily if not
preserved which
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preserved, which
 can result in heavy losses to companies. In conclusion,
although
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 using chemicals
brings
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bring
 some benefits to companies in terms of
sales but
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sales, but
 the negative effect on human health cannot be overlooked. In my opinion people should stop using chemicals and produce organic products.
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