Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

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The use of preservatives in the manufacturing of foods and beverages has become a topic of concern. While increased shelf
life
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is a prime benefit of
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I opine that the disadvantages of adding chemicals to
food
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far outweigh
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this advantages
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these advantages
this advantage
. Admittedly, a major benefit of additives to
food
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is to increase its shelf
life
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it prevents them from early spoilage
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is because the manufacturers are able to quantify and estimate the amount of chemicals and
years
an affirmative
yes
it will be viable respectively.
For example
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cocoa beverage contains sodium citrate a chemical ingredient with a
life
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span of five years and
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products
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product
have
also
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been estimated to
best
increase
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before five years from
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the date
of production
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Furthermore
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, there is reduced frequency in production because the goods are produced in
bulk
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bulk, consequently
consequently
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leading to economic growth and satisfaction.
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, despite the advantages above
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there are some disadvantages associated with adding chemicals to
food
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Firstly
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, it increases the risk of disease
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as cancers
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chemicals have
been been
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
implicated in diseases across the country
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breast cancer has been attributed to processed
food
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this
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is due to the free radicals emitted from the additives in the
food
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Secondly
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, it reduces the taste of the
food
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is because it undergoes
series
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a series
of processes before it is eventually ready for consumption
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there is increased risk of adulteration. Foods that have a long shelf
life
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are easy to fake because these products are most often readily available
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to say they are always in high demand.
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is obviously why
goods
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
foods
that are highly sorted have the tendency of being faked. In conclusion
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although
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there are benefits of additives to
food
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I believe that the drawbacks
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as, loss of nutritional value
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the risk of adulteration and diseases makes the advantages pale in comparison.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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