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With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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The fast rhythm of the present days made many people adopt fast
food
 as their main meals of the day. Fast
food
 can save a lot of
time
 and
also
 avoid the difficulties of home cooking,
however
, when consumed frequently as the most important meals of the day it can be very malicious. Fast
food
 can certainly save
time
 and avoid some troubles. As the name suggests,
this
food
 is quickly prepared so the client can collect it without waiting much, sparing the clients short
time
 to get something to eat.
In addition
 to that, the consumers can
also
 avoid the problems of cooking at home, problems as the ingredients, that they need to go to the grocery shop to buy, the need of knowing how to cook correctly and the energy they have to spend doing it.
Nevertheless
, fast
food
 has big drawbacks. One of these drawbacks is
the extreme
Suggestion
the extremely
 poor alimentation,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 if there are children involved in
this
 bad eating habit.
This
 kind of
food
 lacks the nutrients the human body needs to sustain itself,
furthermore
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furthermore, this
this
 particular problem is even worse for children because they are still in their growing stage.
Besides
 that, fast
food
 is full of oil, sugar and salt,
who when
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who, when
 consumed in big proportions leads to severe health problems, as diabetes, the clogging of the arteries and problems with blood pressure. In conclusion, fast
food
 can surely spare the consumers
time
, yet the many health related issues that, when consumed constantly, make the disadvantages of it a lot more significant than the advantages.
For
Suggestion
Since
that is
 very important to educate people to consume more home cooked
food
, so they can have a healthier life.
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