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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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The use of chemicals in
food
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 production and preservation have merits and demerits. In my own opinion, the many demerits
such
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 as the effects of the unhealthy nature of
food
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 produced and preserved by chemicals have on the human body system is greater than any merit it might have. Admittedly, there are some benefits of preserving and producing
food
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 with chemicals. One of them is the ability to keep and store
food
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 for a long
time
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 rather than
food
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 perishing in a short
time
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.
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, cakes and ice-cream to mention a few have to be preserved with preservatives and stabilisers for them to stand the test of
time
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. It has
also
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 been said that
food
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 preserved and produced by chemicals
are
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is
 readily available for consumption at any given
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,
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,
examples of some of those types of foods
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include
 canned foods like sardines which we can eat at any given
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.
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, a major disadvantage is the effect of the unhealthy nature of foods produced and preserved by chemicals. As
this
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 has a great consequence on the body system of individuals that consume
such
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 foods.
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For
 analysis, it has been recorded that people that live on foods produced and preserved by chemicals don't live as long as those who eat fresh foods.
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 to the aforementioned is the terminal disease that
individual
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an individual
 who eats foods produced and preserved by chemicals are prone to different types of cancer that many people now die of. In conclusion, while some of the merits of consuming foods preserved and produced with chemicals
includes
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include
 the longevity of
food
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 items and availability of ready
food
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 the
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 of its effect on our body system is more deadly than any merit it might give.
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