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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
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someone who makes or repairs something (usually used in combination)
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 from time immemorial, chemicals have been used in the production and preservation of
food
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. In my opinion, I believe the benefits which include improved quality of
food
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 and economic progress outweighs whatever demerits it might have. Admittedly, a prime drawback of chemical usage in producing and preserving
food
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 is that it leads to contamination.
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, pesticides and herbicides tend to be present in
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 foods, thereby making them unsafe for human consumption. Another major demerit is that it changes
natural composition
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the natural composition
 of
food
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.
That is
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 to say, foods produced and preserved naturally are more nutritious than those for which artificial means are used.
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, there are more important benefits of using chemicals in
food
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 making. One of
this
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is improved
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has improved
is improving
food
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 quality.
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,
food
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 produced by artificial means
are
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is
 more robust and appealing to behold.
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, hybrid apples whose production has been chemically enhanced are usually bigger in sizes. Another crucial aspect of artificially enhanced foods is the economic breakthroughs they bring to a society.
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, they are usually attractive to both buyers and foreign inverters, thereby increasing the GDP of the producing country.
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, foods,
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 as fruits and vegetables which have been chemically enhanced have longer shelf lives, whereas natural ones are known to perish rapidly. In conclusion, while part of the pitfalls of chemically produced and preserved
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 include contamination and changes in natural composition,
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 numerous merits
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 as improved
food
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 quality, economic breakthrough and increased shelve life are incomparable to any demerits it might have.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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