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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
Sequel to the necessity to attend to several issues of life at home, people are increasing resolving to chemicals to preserve
food
 even in the
production
 of
food
 as well. In my opinion, there are some benefits derivable from
such
. It's demerits
such
 as its effect on our
body
system
 and the lack of essential taste it brings to our tongues are major negative aspects to consider. Admittedly, the use of chemicals guarantees required durability expected from
food
 ingredients.
In other words
, it makes stock level of
food
 at home to
last
 long as expected in as much as they are well applied
on
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to
 supplements.
This
 is because families these
days usually
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days, usually
 take a sizable quantity of raw
food
 at home to
last
 the family for a while owing to frequent busy schedules of life and prevention of daily
visitation
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visits
 to markets and shopping malls.
For instance
, the recent survey carried out by the Cereal Research Institute of Nigeria (CRIN) revealed that the
silos
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silo
 project embarked upon by the Federal Government of Nigeria revealed that there has been significant improvement in the application of chemical on
food
production
 by more than 60% in 2019 as compared to 2018.
This
 has tremendously enhanced
food
 preservation with desired durability for
usage
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use
 in
food
production
 at factories.
In addition
, usage of chemicals
on
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in
 foods enormously ensure the availability of the desired edible foods for man most especially when the are out of their seasons. Availability of mangoes, corns and maize during
dry season
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the dry season
 in Nigeria is a good example.
This
 is an indication of effective application of
chemicals them
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chemicals in them
. Another positive aspect is that, preservation prevents
food
 from frequent insects and
fungi
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fungus
diseases thereby
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diseases, thereby
 preventing quick decay of
food
 supplements consumed daily.
Nevertheless
, a major drawback of continuous consumption of preserved
food
 is the rate at which human
body
system
 is liable to infirmity and other health related diseases. Reason being that, most inorganic foods are not good to our
body
system
 because they are mostly processed from one stage of
production
 to the other. Taking
indomie
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Indomie
 and spaghetti
for instance
, they are products of combination of factory
food
production
 processes with chemicals to sustain its durability. Excess consumption of them will definitely lead to cancer in the long runs.
Also
,
food
 preservation makes
food
 to lack essential taste and nutrients required to supply the
body
.
This
 is because when raw foods are over preserved to prevent them from diseases, there is
high chance
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a high chance
 to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 taste.
This
 will
consequently
 not give the
body
 the required vitamins and nutrients.
Another
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Other
 dangers of the use of chemicals
on
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in
food
is
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are
such
 encourages farming indolence and laziness.
In other words
, it gives room for availability of inorganic
food
every where
to or in any or all places
everywhere
 because
such
 trend discourages real farming.
This
 will definitely result to ageing decrease because of the absence of organic
food
 from farming. In conclusion, while part of the benefits derived from the usage of chemicals include sustainability of
food
 ingredients for a long time, it's numerous drawbacks among which is majorly it's effect on our
body
system
 is one
that is
 incomparable to any merit it might have.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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