Some employers offer their employees subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, believing that this will make their staff healthier and thus more effective at work. Other employers see no benefit in doing so. Consider the arguments from both aspects of this possible debate, and reach a conclusion.

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Nowadays sport

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Nowadays, sport

clubs and gyms reached a top of popularity among places which could be visited by citizens after work. Frequently we may see how office workers with sport bags like ants run

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by scientists that exactly active kind of relaxing is the most effective and leads to a work increasing.

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tend to think that when employers are caring of their staff it brings benefits for both, especially when

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going about health. Offering membership of gyms could get a possibility to spend free time with use for

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the workers

. Subsiding will be a bonus in

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financial aspects

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purpose. And talking about employers, they will get not only effective fluctuating in work

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respect from their staff. But in my humble opinion, there are not only advantages in considering

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employers have to remember that every person

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staff is individual with their own wishes, needs etc.

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is not for everybody. In spite of my preferring to sport activities I understand that a lot of people don’t share my opinion. Someone would like to unwind by

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on a sofa, reading a book or walking before sleep. The other group of workers could be keen on bicycling

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refuse from gym membership. The majority of employers don’t offer any subsidised membership of gyms and sports clubs, so in general it is a great idea. But

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by their own choice. Only feeling of personal freedom and importance it is possible to reach harmony in working relations.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

341 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

subsidized membership
physical activity
energy levels
employee productivity
work performance
sick leaves
healthier lifestyle
absenteeism
employee morale
workplace environment
employee retention
corporate image
branding
health and wellness benefits
top talent
healthcare costs
medical intervention
lack of usage
underutilization
alternative wellness programs
mental health resources
flexible working hours
professional development
individual responsibility
corporate responsibility

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