Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is a government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Eating
sugar
has
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
on our
health
.
Although
, someone would argue that consuming
sugar
limitation is the duty of government
,
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,
while others think and I believe that it is a personal responsibility to control
sugar
eating.States could help people to stop
sugar
eating but
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eating, but
people's own duty is far greater than that. On the one hand, overeating
sugar
causes a lot of harmful disease. If an individual is cautious about their own eating habit and avoid sweets or some other foods which contain
sugar
, they can live comfortably.Because, sugary foods convey the symptoms of illness,
such
as diabetes, cholesterol and high blood pressure.
Therefore
, we should reduce the amount of
sugar
consumption and
this
could be
most effective
Suggestion
more effective
than the role of government.
On the other hand
, States could impose tax on sugary
goods
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
foods
goodies
.Because,
authority
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the authority
have
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has
to take care of general people and their
health
concern. Government imposing taxes has been decreased buying and selling sweet and other diary products which has
negative impact
Suggestion
a negative impact
on people's
health
issue.
For example
,
last
year France increase 20 percent
tarrif
a government tax on imports or exports
tariff
tariffs
on
sugar
and it had reduced
sugar
consumption among people.Despite, authorities play some important rules to under control
this
problem but
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problem, but
public responsibilities is vital for
overcome
Suggestion
overcoming
sugar
related
helath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heath
problems. In conclusion,
although
, government is reliable to people
health
problem which is caused by eating
sugar but
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sugar, but
I believe that people self caring and own concern about themselves help them to control overeating those things.

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