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Some people think that there are things individuals can do to help prevent global climate change. Others believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that it is only governments and large businesses which can make a difference. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #individuals #climate #change #action #governments #businesses #difference
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It is believed by some people that individual efforts can bring about a
change
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 in preventing the disastrous effect on global climate
change
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 while some others believe that a
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 of
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 magnitude can only be brought about by large scale businesses and government policies. In my opinion, large scale businesses and government policies may have the upper
hand but
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hand, but
 protecting the
environment
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 should begin at a smaller level
from
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of
 the individuals and involve people from all walks of life. A vast percentage of the activities that has led to global climate
change
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 is preventable, the cause being our collective recklessness and incompetence. To illustrate, most people use private transport rather than public transport for comfort and ease, not bothering about the impact their reckless choice would have on the
environment
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. Cutting trees for wood and fuel is
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 an individual choice that could be done with better judgement. Improper disposal of domestic waste by individuals, leaves a detrimental effect on the
environment
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.
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, people in government offices and in big commercial firms can bring about a massive
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 because of the
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of power and resources. A ban on the usage of plastics can bring about a massive
change
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, in a quick time period. Big product manufacturing companies can limit their waste production and utilise products which are not harmful to the
environment
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. To conclude, the problem of global climate
change
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 needs to be tackled at every level to bring about a real
change
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. Individuals need to get involved with the policy makers and the business firms in
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 fight to protect our
environment
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable modes of transportation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy sources
  • incentives
  • eco-friendly habits
  • mitigation
  • recycling
  • energy-efficient appliances
  • emission standards
  • green technology
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • industrial waste
  • collaborative efforts
  • combating climate change
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