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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the number of meals eaten in fast food restaurants and sit-down restaurants.
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The pie charts represent the proportion of the average household's allotted money for eating out in
a
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a restaurant
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restaurants
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 in four distinct years (1970 to 2000),
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 the line graph compares the total number of foods consumed by the family in 2 different
restaurants
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 (fast food and sit-down
restaurants
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).
Overall
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, we can see that the budget for eating in
the
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apply
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restaurants
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 increased over the given period,
whereas
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 cooking at home declined.
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,
although
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 the two
restaurants
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 we popular in the initial year, eating
in
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fast
foods
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food
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 became more famous
at
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in
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 the final year. In detail, in 1970,
home cooked
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home-cooked
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 meals were the favourite family's choice of food, which accounted for 90%
compared
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 to only 10% of eating out in a restaurant.
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, by 2000, the rate
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begun
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 to increase for the latter, wherein both of the options had 50%. Meanwhile, the popularity of both fast
foods
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food
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 and sit-down
restaurants
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 rose in the years covered. To be specific, both stood at 20 meals per year in 1970, after which it experienced an increase in the following decades with fast food having almost 90 servings daily and 50 servings for sit-down
restaurants
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words restaurants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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