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The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.

The line graph compares the number of goods transported to the UK by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in million of tonnes.
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The line graph compares the number of
goods
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 sent to the
UK
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 by four various modes of transportation in the years 1974 to 2002. Data are expressed in
million
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millions
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 of
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that the figures for transporting
goods
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 increased during the given period.
Moreover
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, transportation via land and water
were
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 primarily used for shipping the
goods
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 to the United Kingdom,
while
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 the pipeline was
utilize
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utilised
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 the least.
According to
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 the graph, the
quantity
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number
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 of
goods
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 being delivered to the
UK
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 via land stood at nearly 70 million
tonnes
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 (MT).
This
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 number started to grow slightly in the succeeding years, hitting almost 100
tonnes
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 in the final year.
Moreover
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, delivery via sea was
likewise
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 commonly used to import
goods
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 to the
UK
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, which delivered just below 40 MG of products in 1974, before it had doubled its number to 60M
tonnes
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 in 2002. Meanwhile, the least used method for shipping
cargos
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cargo
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 to the
UK
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were
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was
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 via railway and pipeline. The former shipped 40 million
tonnes
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 of
goods
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 in 1974, after which it had minimal fluctuations, before ending at the same figure of 40MT in 2002.
Lastly
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,
use
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the use
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 of
pipeline
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pipelines
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imported
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was imported
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 merely below 20MT in 1974 but
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 increased steadily to over 20 metric tons in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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