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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter • advise them of your situation • explain how this is affecting you • request a new card You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear You should write at least 150 words.

#minutes #student #identification #card #director #services #situation #request #addresses
Dear Mr Ahmed, I am writing you
this
 letter to request a new ID card because I have lost mine
last
 Wednesday while I was
in
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 the way to the college by
a
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taxi. I have faced many problems because of my lost ID card. The security at the gate of the college refused to get me in,
however
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 I showed them my lectures’ timetable and my friends told them that I am a student in the language department.
However
, they did not change the rules.
As a result
, unfortunately, I could not hand
my
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 assignment for
phonetics
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 class. For sure I lose marks in
this
 subject.
In addition
 to that, on Thursday night I could not register
on
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 the linguistics class, which negatively
effect
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 on my
studying
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. I have to wait for the
next
 month to apply. I really suggest putting an announcement on the wallboard to advise the other students to take
a
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good care of their ID cards to prevent themselves from several troubles. I am looking forward to
hear
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 from you soon.
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Your
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 sincerely, Heba Mahmoud
Submitted by tarek-mohamad on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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