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Group activities or team work help in developing life skills do you agree or disagree?Explain

#group #activities #team #work #life #skills
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I agree that in developing
life
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skills team
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skills, team
work
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 help. Team
work
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 is the in thing in
corporate world
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the corporate world
 today
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in
software
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 company
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sports and even healthcare sector. In
software
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 company it helps as not all can do every
task
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task, for
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example troubleshooting
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example, troubleshooting
,
software
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 testing and
software
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 development.Some are experts
in
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particular field
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a particular field
the particular field
particular fields
.In sports even in individual sports like tennis
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athletics now you need a team of dietician
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coach and fitness coach to be competitive.In
healthcare
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health care
 you need the team of nursing staff
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hospital manager
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physician, cardiologist
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surgeon trained in different organ specific surgery to run the hospital. As already stated not everyone is able to do everything
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Jack of all.Every human is unique in abilities.Team
work
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also
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 helps to know how
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 person is thinking
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knew
not of long duration; having just (or relatively recently) come into being or been made or acquired or discovered
new
 new ideas in dealing with different tasks.
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 helps in professional
life
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 by sharing problems as well as in personal
life
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like working mothers.Helps to know they manage the multitasking of managing home and
work
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 simultaneously.Even helps to solve personal issues by discussing amongst each other.
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, decrease stress by discussing problems
in
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at
work
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 makes a person socially responsible by creating sense of how to deal with others
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how to share success
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how to let others have the credit.Let person understand the issues people face in
life
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 and
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 help in developing lessons for
life
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This
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 should can be done by inculcating habit in children.To have
better society
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a better society
 tomorrow.Making them learn it in school and house.Asking them to share.
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