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Some people get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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Nowadays we are living in a society based on consuming.
As a result
, some people have problems in dealing with
this
 budget and they get into debt by buying things they don't need and can't afford.
This
 kind of
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 is encountered quite often in our present days, mainly because of the possibility of buying goods in leasing.
Hence
, people buy most of the goods using the credit card without having a clear idea on how much money they possess or they owe.
Also
, another cause for
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 could be psychological. The
advertisment
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
 and the subliminal messages one
encournters
come together
encounters
encounter
encountered
 in a regular day in a big city has an enormous impact on one's brain. The main problem is the lack of awareness of the serious
effets
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 that
advertisment
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
 can have on people. In order to prevent people from adopting
this
 dangerous
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
, measures should be taken so as to raise awareness among people.
Also
, one must learn how to manage his
bdget
a sum of money allocated for a particular purpose
budget
 in order to get a balance between
necessiting
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessity
 and pleasure. Keeping a record
on
Suggestion
of
 income and monthly spendings would be very helpful and would give to the consumer an overall image on how his budget should be spent. All summed up, the chances of becoming a victim of the consumer's society are high nowadays due to the surrounding temtations but
this
 problem could be easily avoid by being aware of
this
 dangers and having a rational attitude when dealing with mone

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