Write about the following topic: A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

With the advent of privatization some
holds
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hold
a stand that
government
’s primary duty is to defend the country and provide
basic infrastructure
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the basic infrastructure
like water, electricity and roads, and private companies or individuals should take responsibilities to cater to secondary needs of the citizens like education, health and transportation, to name a few. I have three reasons to agree with
this
view. The
first
reason, in countries like India, corruption is the burning issue. In
government sector
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the government sector
, no one will show interest to do your work unless you offer them something.
For example
, in Indian vehicle driving license issuing department, if you bribe the driving test examiner, he will issue a license at the very moment. Everywhere in
government
departments, the scenario is the same. By giving all
such
secondary responsibilities to private companies or individuals, we ensure ourselves, we can reduce the corruption. The
second
reason, in
government
departments, the efficiency of employees is very low. They will consume a whole day to do a work of mere one and half hours.
This
is the attitude of every
government
official because they know that
this
is the tradition which is set by their superiors. Privatization will eradicate
this
slow working mentality, because they have to earn
money
. They won’t get paid if their work is not completed. The
third
reason, at least we will get
benefits
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the benefits
of our paid taxes. We pay some amount of our hard earned
money
to
government
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the government
for our welfare.
Instead
of using
this
money
for us, governments spend it for their welfare. To illustrate
this
, according to
recent food bill
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the recent food bill
of
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in
the Indian parliament, approximately 2lac rupees are spent behind one member. Of course, we have to pay
tax but
Accept comma addition
tax, but
rather to
paying
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pay
to
government
we will be paying to private companies. Our
money
will be used for a real public welfare purpose. To sum up, in the
third
world, citizens are living
miserable life
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miserable lives
a miserable life
and to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their primary and secondary needs and amenities
government
should spin off their some responsibilities and hand it over to
private sector
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the private sector
.
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