While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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In order to select the best employee in an organisation multitude factors are taken into account
such
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as age
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skill
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academic qualification
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,
expertise by
employer
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the employer
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It is suggested that the priority should be given to personal factors
instead
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of
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education
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educational
background and experience.I strongly oppose
this
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as each and every factor has its own
importance so
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importance, so
a balance should me maintained
instead
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of
prioritsiation
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To begin
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with, only personal factors cannot showcase the overall potential of a candidate
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To cite an example
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a candidate applying as a software engineer is good looking and have effective communication skill but does not have
relevant academic qualifaction
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a relevant academic qualification
relevant academic qualification
is totally unsuitable for
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job
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the job
a job
because he does not go through with all the phases and terms related to the designation
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Moreover
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,
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,
personal qualities cannot
gurantee
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
guaranty
that an employee
have
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has
knowledge related to all aspects of
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job
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the job
a job
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so
to a very great extent or degree
So
taking these factors as preference cannot be fruitful for
entire growth
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the entire growth
of an organisation
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Eloborating
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Elaborating
further
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,
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,
education
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and experience are the two fundamental aspects and most of the selection is done on
basis
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the basis
of these
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The reason for
this
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is that
education
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reflects the knowledge of
applicant
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applicant, however
however
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even only
education
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cannot act as tool to judge the key and the best human resource
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For instance
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, if an applicant
give
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gives
interview
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an interview
for
manger
someone who controls resources and expenditures
manager
job
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with MBA
degree but
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degree, but
totally ignorant with effective communication skills and does not represent the conduct and essential requirement of
job
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duties cannot be hired as
job
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demands strong skills in communication.
Therefore
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,
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,
only
education
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is not
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
for
selection process
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the selection process
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In conclusion
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,
all factors have
thier
of them or themselves
their
own
imprtance
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
and a
balacing
getting two things to correspond
balancing
approach should be used to select the employee because
preferece
a strong liking
preference
prefers
to single factor can hinder the main aim of
selection process
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the selection process
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