You have bought an item but when you got it home, you found it had some problems. You returned the item and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the item has still not been repaired/fixed. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter: Introduce yourself Explain the situation Say what action you would like the company to take.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my disappointment over an item I bought from your company branch at Ikeja

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week Saturday and to request for immediate replacement of the item. My name is John Smith and I am one of your regular

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. I purchased a rechargeable fan from your store on Saturday 16th July and on getting home, I discovered that the rechargeable battery was not good. I charged the fan for about two hours as indicated in the manual, only to found out that the battery does not

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up to 5 minutes of usage which is different from the written specification. Immediately, I returned the item to your store for repair and up to

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moment I am yet to get feedback from the company representative. Though I would have waited for it to be repaired or fixed,

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I would prefer a replacement because my birthday party is tomorrow and I would need the service of the fan. Thanks for your cooperation as I await your quick response. Yours faithfully, John Smith.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
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although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

178 words

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