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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Women are the backbone of society and the
develpoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
 of
country
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a country
the country
 is not possible without females.Most of the masses believe that women should have similar rights as compared to men for working in same domains
such
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 as serve in the
army
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 or work as a police officers Others
,
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,
however
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thought that some professions are not satisfactory for women.
This
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aof
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 the argument in detail. On the face of the statement
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there are multiple factors to support my view is that women should have their own rights to work as
policeman
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a policeman
policemen
 or serve in the
army
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 like men do because in these days
,
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we have to see that women are working shoulder to shoulder with men in each and every
domains
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domain
.
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Despite thinking about the discrimination government
sholud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be given new
opportunties
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
 to females about their own choice and interest
.
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.
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for
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For
 instance, Sania
mirza
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Mirza
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,
Kiran
bedi
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Bedi
,
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,
kalpna
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chawala
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 who has set the real example all over the world
.
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No one can underestimate the true power of women they
cn
able to
can
 do everything which they want in life.
On the contrary
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the latter view
suggest
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suggests
 that
such
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 jobs are not favourable for the females
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 females are
physical
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physically
 and
emotinally
in an emotional manner
emotionally
 weak as compared to men, but in
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army
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the army
an army
 these are the crucial for against the attackers
.
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Besides
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this
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,
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,
If the women will work on
army
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 or police
services
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services, thus
thus
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 they will leave their family in
this
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 way, children may go in wrong path because
pf
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 the far distance from their mother working in
army
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 services To conclude
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to say that it depends on the choice of women what they want in their life since they have right to take their
decions
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
designs
 by themselves and no one put
restrctions
a principle that limits the extent of something
restrictions
 on them.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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