Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police force or military force, such as the army, while others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Women are the backbone of society and the
develpoment
act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining
development
of
country
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a country
the country
is not possible without females.Most of the masses believe that women should have similar rights as compared to men for working in same domains
such
as serve in the
army
or work as a police officers Others
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however
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thought that some professions are not satisfactory for women.
This
essay will discuss about both sides
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connects a noun with the preceding word
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the argument in detail. On the face of the statement
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there are multiple factors to support my view is that women should have their own rights to work as
policeman
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a policeman
policemen
or serve in the
army
like men do because in these days
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we have to see that women are working shoulder to shoulder with men in each and every
domains
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domain
.
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Despite thinking about the discrimination government
sholud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be given new
opportunties
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
to females about their own choice and interest
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for
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For
instance, Sania
mirza
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Mirza
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Kiran
bedi
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Bedi
,
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kalpna
chawala
who has set the real example all over the world
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No one can underestimate the true power of women they
cn
able to
can
do everything which they want in life.
On the contrary
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the latter view
suggest
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suggests
that
such
jobs are not favourable for the females
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
females are
physical
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physically
and
emotinally
in an emotional manner
emotionally
weak as compared to men, but in
army
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the army
an army
these are the crucial for against the attackers
.
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Besides
this
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If the women will work on
army
or police
services
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services, thus
thus
they will leave their family in
this
way, children may go in wrong path because
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of
the far distance from their mother working in
army
services To conclude
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i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would like to say that it depends on the choice of women what they want in their life since they have right to take their
decions
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
designs
by themselves and no one put
restrctions
a principle that limits the extent of something
restrictions
on them.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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