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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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Over the past fifty years, there has been significant variation in the percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat a vegetarian diet. In 1960, only a small percentage of adolescents (about 1
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) were vegetarian. There was
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 a steep increase until 1978
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 when over 15
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 were following a vegetarian diet.
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, the percentage fell steadily until 1990 and
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 fluctuated for a decade. It reached a low point of just 4
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 in 1996. It has risen gradually since 2000 and is expected to continue to do so over the
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 few years. After reaching a high point in around 2015, it is projected to decline again and level off by the decade’s end.
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, the graph shows two main periods of interest in vegetarianism among young people in the UK: one peaking around 1978 and the
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 projected to peak approximately forty years later, in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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