The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart illustrates the ranking of ten nations which manufactured and utilised electricity in 2014. It is true that China and US were the two
countries
which manufactured and utilised the most electrical energy. We can
also
see that the electricity produced was always higher than the consumption in many
countries
except Germany. Out of ten nations, China was the
countries
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that ranked first in the electricity power
supplication
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and expenditure in the year 2014 with 5398 billion
billion
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of
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kWh
provided and 5322 billion
kWh
consumed.
While
US
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ranked
second
with 4099 milliard
kWh
of power production and 3866 milliard
kWh
of energy consumption. Looking at the other
countries
, we can see that voltage fabrication and use of Russia ranked first. Other remaining
countries
like Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea produced and used between 1000 and 400 milliard
kWh
.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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