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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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Employment process involves the employer interviewing the applicants to know how well the applicant meets the requirements for working in the organization. I totally agree the employer should pay more attention to a potential employee's personal qualities, rather than qualifications and skills with the following points. A potential employee may have a vast knowledge in practical terms than in the theoretical form, without having much work skills. Take
for example
, a fresh graduate with high skill in internet marketing, but with little or no skills in the banking sector. The individual may not have the qualifications to work as a banker or even having any banking experience, but his/her personal quality if well positioned can earn big points for the banking sector. In
this
 modern age of technology, self education is very much easier that ends up boosting the personal quality of an individual. An example is when an individual is very good in Coding, but has little knowledge and all necessary qualifications, he/she can be more productive than someone with all the required qualifications and skills,
such
 that he/she has a vast knowledge and always in a practical mode of a divergence area of specialization than the other person with specific qualification and skills of a particular area or field of work. I hope with
this
 explanation I am able to convince you that the employer should pay more attention to a potential employee's personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience.

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