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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
Emplyee
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Ample
 is one of the key
element
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elements
 behind the growth of
company
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the company
a company
. During the hiring,
interviewer
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the interviewer
interviewers
 should more focus on internal ability rather than academic
achivement
the action of accomplishing something
achievement
achievements
 and experience in the field. I agree with the opinion to
large extent
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a large extent
 and my inclination justified in
ensuing paragraphs
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the ensuing paragraphs
. Among the various viewpoints, the strongest one is, candidate with
flexible nature
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the flexible nature
easily adopt
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easily adopts
 the new system or technology implemented in the organisation.
For instance
, in the field of Information
Technoloy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
 salaried have to work with many
kind
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kinds
 of softwares in periodical
time
. To change with the new software, it can be
unconfortable
conducive to or feeling mental discomfort
uncomfortable
 for the employee
whi
the person or persons that; the one that
who
will
 have
fix mind-set
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the fix mind-set
.
Moreover
, person with
calm personality
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a calm personality
 gives importance to search the solution in critical situation rather than waiting for superior.
Individual
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An individual
Individually
 with
this
 kind of
approach adjust
Accept comma addition
approach, adjust
 in the environment very fast and improve the team-work.
Furthermore
, in the
time
 of
short deadline
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short deadlines
,
behaviour
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the behaviour
 of the team member plays
key role
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a key role
.
Employee
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An employee
The employee
 who
have
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has
 nature to agree on every situation without any objection ready to do overtime to meet the deadline of any task. In
this
 situation management can do proper resource allocation to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
 the task. Apart from
this
,
ability
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the ability
 of multitasking creates
positive impression
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a positive impression
 of employee in the company and increase the change of
higher position
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higher positions
 in
short amount
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a short amount
 of
time
. On
contrary
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the contrary
, it is difficult to judge the candidate in
such
 a short
time
 of interview. Qualification ranks
clearls
readily apparent to the mind
clears
 the picture of
ability
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the ability
 of the person which was judged by
institutes
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the institutes
. So, it is good to take
dissission
the act of making up your mind about something
decisions
 based on the degree and
result
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the result
results
.
Additionally
, for
specific vacancy
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a specific vacancy
specific vacancies
,
person
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a person
people
 have to relay on the university results.
For example
, to hire a candidate for a temporary research topic, it is important the good knowledge on that specific area rather than nature. All in all, for growth of the company and achieve the specific goal on
time
 behaviour is
most important
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more important
of
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for
 the
emplyee
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employee
employees
. Where as in recruitment for limited area or
time
 importance to the degree and experience
hold
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holds
 more
benefite
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
benefits
 to the
orfanisation
the persons (or committees or departments etc.) who make up a body for the purpose of administering something
organisation
organization
.
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