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Alternative energy resources that use the natural power of the wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal, oil and gas that we use power our cities and transport.

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Some people say that getting
power
 of
nature
 is costly and needs a
lot
 of special technologies and experts rather than receiving
this
 from coal, oil and gas which is used to light up towns. In my point of view, it is true enough that retrieving
energy
 from the sun,
wind
 and wave needs a
lot
 of various methods, but the cost may be lesser as compared to using oil or gas because the
energy
 from sun, wave and
wind
 is free. Producing the
power
 of
nature
 is not an easy job and it required a
lot
 of advanced technologies and experts who understand how to do. The reason is that
wind
 direction can change at any time as well as wave so we need people who know these things well.
In addition
, it requires a
lot
 of space to build machines to catch
wind
 so it is usually built in rural regions.
On the other hand
, getting
energy
 from coal, oils and gas is easy because we just need people and machines to drill to get resources and it is so simple as compared to use the natural resources.
However
, getting
power
 from the
nature
 looks complicated to produce, they may not be as expensive as others.
Initially
, they will cost a
lot
 of money to build machines and hire experts, they will save a
lot
 of money in the long run because the
power
energy
 from these will never die and they are free to use, unlike the getting
power
 from the fossil fuels because we need a
lot
 of people and machines to drill out oils or gas.
In addition
, there may be less oils or gas production in near future because of shortage of resources and they may run out one day.
For instance
, the price of oils increased dramatically in the recent years,
therefore
 people started to find other ways to generate the
energy
. In my point of view, production the
power
 from the
nature
 is complicated and the cost may be lesser in the future.
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