People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

Citizens live in urban areas face many issues in their daily life. While
this
may be valid to a certain extent, I would argue that governments should encourage people to migrate to smaller regional towns. It is understandable that people who live in a big city are facing with being late at
work
due to the heavy traffics. The
first
reason for
that is
the time when people go to
work
.
For example
, workers come to the office at the same time
everyday
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every day
so it leads to
traffic
congestion..
Second
, people tend to go to
work
by their own vehicles.
For instance
, people go to
work
by their motorbikes or cars so
this
results in the
traffic
jams.
Moreover
, the more
traffic
the more carbon-dioxide is produced
to
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in
by
the air, and the more citizen is vulnerable to numerous serious disease involving lung and heart.
For example
,
vehicles
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vehicle
release emission that
make
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makes
the air polluted heavily and cause some heart diseases for citizens.
However
, I hold a belief that governments should encourage people to migrate to smaller regional towns.
Firstly
, the
traffic
in the countryside is more simple as the office is near their home.
Therefore
, they just go to
work
on foot or by bicycle.
In addition
, the convenient shops and highway street
also
nearby their home so it is
benefit
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beneficial
to the citizen in their daily activity. The environment is
more fresh
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fresher
than in the cities so people can be prevented from heart disease and the daily lifestyle will be more healthy. In conclusion, it is believed that living in a large city brings many advantages.
However
, the citizen today are
facing
Suggestion
faced
with many problems in their everyday life.
Therefore
, I personally believe that the government should encourage them to migrate to smaller towns.
Submitted by Thanh on

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