These days many families move abroad for work. Some people believe that this benefits the children in these families. Others believe that it makes their lives more difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Needless to say, in
this
modern era people go foreign countries for new job opportunities. Many people opine that it is
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for children's
future but
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future, but
on
other side
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the other side
many people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
that it makes
thier
of them or themselves
their
life much
difficult
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more difficult
. I will hash out both statements in
this
essay in
upcoming paragraphs
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the upcoming paragraphs
.
To begin
with, I agree with later view up to some extent because when people move aboard related to
thier
of them or themselves
their
work
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
children's get many difficulties.
Firslty when
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Firstly, when
Firstly when
they go to
new place
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the new place, then
the new place then
then
children face many difficulties like it is very difficult for them to adjust
on
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to
new places, they
also
face difficulties in
thier
of them or themselves
their
academic because it is an uphill task for them to continue
thier
of them or themselves
their
study in
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country because it will
takes
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take
time to get to know about the language of that country and
that is
why sometimes they are mentally
disturb
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disturbed
.
Moreover
,
they
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They
do not feel comfortable in foreign countries because their parents are busy
in
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with
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
works. Apart from
this
, they feel
hesitation
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hesitant
to make new friends
on
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in
new places. But every coin has two faces, some people say that the migration of families on
aboard
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a board
is beneficial for children's because when they go
on
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to
new places they get more knowledge about the culture and tradition of native people.
Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
learn new languages which
improves
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improve
their communication skills and they get more job opportunities in
this
golabal
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
global
world. To encapsulate, children's get more difficulties when their families move to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
countries so that parents should think about that
things
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thing
so that children's will not face problems regarding these issues.

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