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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for development of poor nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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For the growth of any underdeveloped
country
, advancements are needed in various sectors
such
 as health, education and trade.
Therefore
, some are of the opinion that the government of developed countries can share
this
 load of poorer countries. While, others feel it is the sole responsibility of the underdeveloped nation itself. I personally feel that big nations can facilitate the poor countries.
To begin
 with, health and education are the basic needs of a
country
.
In other words
, good medical services in a
country
 lead to healthier citizens, resulting in better productivity and lessens the spread of contagious diseases within as well as to other nations.
Moreover
, having a proper education system is mandatory as it brings fresh ideas and breaks all myths existing in societies. As the literacy rate increases in a
country
, crime rate tends to decrease.
Therefore
, rich countries should aid poor ones as these aspects are an indispensable part of living.
In addition
, trades bring money into the
country
.
This
 means that, providing finance or investing in businesses in underdeveloped countries, the latter can generate money from exports and
also
 generate more employment and the funds can be used in other essential sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underdeveloped nations
  • economic disparity
  • global cooperation
  • moral obligation
  • historical exploitation
  • interconnected world
  • economic stability
  • quality of life
  • trade relationships
  • humanitarian aid
  • capacity building
  • dependency syndrome
  • sustainable development
  • bilateral agreements
  • economic priorities
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