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the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town closing. do you agree or disagree

#growth #shops #town
I think the growth of online shopping would not lead to all shops in town closing. Even if online shopping has become more secure and conv
ient, a
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
ctual shops still have the abilities to attract customers and provide irreplaceable
experience
. Indeed online shopping has grown over time as it offers more to customers with shorter time. Many brands that sold products exclusively online star
tiing to
extend their brand "offline" as they open retail stores in cities and towns.
For example
, one of the biggest online retailer, Amazon has already opened groc
ery and
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a grocery
 book stores. Customers can walk in, use their Amazon accounts to sign in and walk out with their selected products. It is easy and fuss free. Customers do not nned
to
require as useful, just, or proper
need
pay with cash or credit cards, Amazon's technology will record what they left with and bill their accounts. Like many other brands, Amazon sees the attractiveness of actual stores. When customers see and interact with a product in person, they are more likely to buy it.
In addition
 to online brands opening retail sotr
es, th
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
stores
ere are
also
 the customer trust and shopping
experience
 aspects. Many customers still prefer to see and interact with the products before buying them. Speaking from my personal
experience
, i kn
o
refers to the speaker or writer
I
w how scrolling through pages of products and checking all the details before I place an order can be frustrating and complicated. There are "traps" that a customer may fall into if they are not being careful. They may choose the wrong size, the colo
r for
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
the
Suggestion
of
 actual product may appear to be different from the pictures online, the product does not give the sati
sfication as
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
the customer expect from looking at the website....the
lis
Suggestion
The
t goes on and on.
This
 might be the reason for customers
such
 as myself prefer to check out the products in stores before buying them online. Especially for skincare and food products, a sampling prior to purchasing is essential to make sure there are no aler
gies or
hypersensitivity reaction to a particular allergen; symptoms can vary greatly in intensity
allergies
dislikes of certain smells.
Although
 online shopping is growing rapp
idly and
with rapid movements
rapidly
 leading to quite some stores closing down, there are
also
 new stores opening up at the same time. Both the customers and businesses see the value of stores, whether it is for making sales figures or g
et
a unit of surface area equal to 100 square meters
are
ting personal sati
sfication. St
the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation
satisfaction
ores in cities and towns will continue to serve a purpose and play a part in the shopping
experience
, which is why the growth of online shopping does not mean the end for stores in cities.

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