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In modern times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this change occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

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In recent years, it is true that adolescents have
tendency
Suggestion
tended
 to spend much
time
 with their friends rather than their family.
This
 change can be attributed to a whole host of reasons and it is a great of important for parents to force
their
objective case of they
them
 to spend more
time
 at home. From my perspective, there are some outstanding reasons for
this
 change.
First
, since the generation gap between parent and
child
 find it difficult to have lifestyle in common. It means that some parents who are prone to apply old-fashioned ideas and definitely stick with their
child
such
 as
technolygy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
, clothes, food..... In
additon
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
, young adults are likely to discover and
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
creates
 new things.
For example
,
today
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today's
todays
 technology like smartphone, laptop,....
are
Suggestion
Are
 greatly mesmerized by young people and sometimes they use in ulterior way when parents deter them from it. As a
results
Suggestion
result
, adolescents gradually distance
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 from
family
Suggestion
the family
.
Secondly
, their friends who are the same age with them that would be easy to understand and share together. In fact, Take me as an example, I am exceedingly comfortable to share
ups
Suggestion
the ups
 and downs in life when having difficulty due to having
common interest
Suggestion
common interests
a common interest
 and thought.
Besides
, a good friend is willing to share and give you some
usefull
being of use or service
useful
 advice to make you better rather than parents.
Athough
Suggestion
Although
, the
importace
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
 of friends
have
Suggestion
has
trememdously
Suggestion
tremendous
tremendously
 effect on
child
Suggestion
children
a child
the child
, it is a great
significant
Suggestion
signing
significance
sign
 for parents to
encourge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
encourages
encouraged
 them to spend
time
 at home.
First
, there
have
Suggestion
has
 a great deal of bad guys
on
Suggestion
to
society and
Accept comma addition
society, and
 they could do harm for
child
 if parents are
accupied
held or filled or in use
occupied
 with work to meet the needs in
hetic life
Suggestion
a hectic life
hectic life
hates life
.
In other words
,
childs
a young person of either sex
children
 who are inexperience would be easily induced and taken
advantages
Suggestion
advantage
advantaged
 of their's
naiety
with neatness
neatly
 into society's vices
such
 as robbery, drugs, prostitution.
Therefore
, it is imperative for families to take much notice of them to
education
Suggestion
educate
 as well as protect them before happening unexpected situations.
Secondly
, members in family need to
creat
make or cause to be or to become
create
 a close-knit
relationships
Suggestion
relationship
 together. If parents did not force them to spend
time
 at home, it finds it easy to keep away with
familiy
Suggestion
the family
family
 and lack of caring together. As a consequence, by
learning travelling
Accept comma addition
learning, travelling
, cooking, talking between family and
child
 is a
fanstatic
ludicrously odd
fantastic
 way to improve the love family. In conclusion,
although
 it is undeniable that friends make a valuable contribution to young people's life, parents force them to spend
time
on
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with
family
Suggestion
the family
 since the sentimental value of
family
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the family
 is extremely sacred and warm.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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