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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being.

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Working is an inevitable event in an adult life and larger percentage of time during
this
 stage is spent at
work
.
However
, job
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 is an important factor that contribute to the wellness of an individual and
this
 can be achieved by having sole interest in in the
work
 and earning valuable monetary aid
at
Suggestion
in
ouvre
of or belonging to us
our
. There are various factors that enhance
work
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
.
Firstly
, working in an area of interest is very essential.
This
 is a major foundation in achieving maximum satisfaction at
work
.
For example
, those who use use their hobbies as jobs are more productive and successful because it involves their maximum concentration and
work
 is always less tasking due to
passion
Suggestion
the passion
 that drives them. These on a long term will help them to live a stress free and
purposefull
serving as or indicating the existence of a purpose or goal
purposeful
purposefully
 life.
Secondly
, monetary aid is another is another means of enhancing satisfaction among employees.
Such
 as, stipends for transports or paid leave. One reason why people
work
 is to get paid, so that, they can meet up with their financial responsibilities. Fulfilling these needs will confer a sense of satisfaction
on
Suggestion
to
 them. While certain individuals have the opinion that
this
 cannot be achieved, I believe That,
work
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 can be earned if, employers put into consideration worker's comfortability while setting up their businesses.
For instance
, creating good environment and
implemention
the act of accomplishing some aim or executing some order
implementation
 of
standard salary scheme
Suggestion
the standard salary scheme
. These will motivate worker's on the continuance of the job. In conclusion, passion and stipends at
work
 are ways of having a fulfilled adult working life.
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