Nowadays many children are playing computer games instead of doing sports activities. Why is it happening? Is it a negative or positive development?

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Morden era, children are playing computer games rather than outdoor activities when compared to primitive ages. In my opinion, it's a negative development because it does not serve a valuable, if it's used in a proper way. Parents are running throughout a day, because both are working professionals due to that they teach their children to play online games, so children won't disturb their parents when they go to work.
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, children are addicted to the games from childhood. Parents spend huge amount of money for buying the computer games which make children happy, they spends too much time in playing games. It not only affect Visions problem, but
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physically. Because sitting in one place for too much cause back bone problem and seeing gadgets cause sight problems
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, there is a game called Blue whale, in that game, several tasks are given to the children and
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its scared to death. Many children have played the game and
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ended with death. Parents given enormous benefits to their children indeed. But
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should know how to put their feet down. Conclusion. Children have been playing computer games is a negative development because it causes lots more problems for children.To overcome these children needs to do outdoor activities that will help physically and mentally.
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