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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In the letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you with regard to the advertisement published
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 the Times magazine
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 the 1st of September, seeking to recruit a caretaker for their child. I am currently enrolled in an early childhood education course and I have been planning to take a break for two semesters and travel.
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 working and taking care of the child, I would
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 be able to travel without worrying about the additional lodging costs. Being enrolled in
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early childhood education, I have learnt skills to manage kids in an effective manner. Not only that, I love to spend time with them
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 and play games. I have
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 been volunteering at the YMCA of Toronto. In my free time, I am planning to visit nearby tourist places. I would definitely like to see
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famous cities like Melbourne, Sydney and I am planning to do that after I finish the 6 months. I believe that I possess all the skills you are looking for and I would love to babysit. I look forward to hearing from you, Yours sincerely,
Anukaran
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Ankaran
Ankara
 Kathuria

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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