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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should write at least 250 words.

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In recent years, some employers
makes
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make
 a rule to regulate their employees to
dress
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 smartly. But some people that value quality of
work
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 is more important than appearance. In my opinion, the appropriately dressed and capable worker has more chance to be
favored
preferred above all others and treated with partiality
favoured
 by the company. In all kinds of social occasions, making a good
first
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 impression to other people is a
well
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good
 beginning for continued understanding between the two sides. Dressing smartly is one of the most important
way
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ways
 to make a good impression to clients. If they don’t
dress
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 well to show their respect to the client, they don’t have any chance to collaborate with
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 company. And
then
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, well-dressed employees make customers feel that they are professionals, clients tends to collaborate with well-dressed person that those who are not. Many famous people like jack
ma
objective form of "I"
me
,
buffett
strike against forcefully
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 and bill gates, when they are attend business negotiations, they all wear neat suits to present their respect and professional to others. Quality of
work
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 is
a
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an
 important factor that will
influent
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influence
 continue co-operation, only high quality of
work
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 can help employees to build up a good relationship
whit
expresses the means used
with
clients
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client
.
Although
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, proper
dress
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 may allow customers to choose you as a partner, you can demonstrate enough
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work ability
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work, ability
 to your clients that will destruct the continue collaboration. In conclusion, for neat
dress
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 and good working ability, I think neither can be neglected. Because these two factors are important factors for businessman to succeed in their field

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