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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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It is clear that the three oldest underground systems are larger and serve significantly more passengers than the newer systems. The London
underground
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 is the oldest
system
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, having opened in 1863. It is
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 the largest
system
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, with 394
kilometres
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 of route. The
second
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 largest
system
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, in Paris, is only about half the size of the London underground, with 199
kilometres
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 of route.
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, it serves more people per year.
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 only
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 in terms of size, the Tokyo
system
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 is easily the most used,with 1927 million passengers per year. Of the three newer networks, the Washington DC underground is the most extensive,
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with 126
kilometres
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 of route, compared to only 11
kilometres
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 and 28
kilometres
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 for the Kyoto and Los Angeles systems. The Los Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001,
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 the Kyoto network is the smallest and serves only 45 million passengers per year.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inaugurated
  • route length
  • passenger capacity
  • urban sprawl
  • public transport
  • technological advancements
  • economic contribution
  • industrial growth
  • population density
  • network expansion
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