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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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nowadays
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Nowadays
, many companies are
tend
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tending
 toward
uniformty
a condition in which everything is regular and unvarying
uniformity
uniformly
 in their
stuff
an ordinary man
stiff
 clothes.
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 I agree to some
extant
the point or degree to which something extends
extent
 with the importance of uniform, I believe that higher professional
work
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are
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is
 more important than workers'
appereance
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
.
In
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On
 the one hand, it can be argued why they could believe in the way of employees dressing. In a
such
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 case, workers will be easily
identify in a
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identified with such a
identify with a such
identified with a such
identified in a such
such
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company
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.
Thus
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, will
also
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 rise the respect between the employees and show
equalness
having the same quantity, value, or measure as another
equals
uniqueness
coolness
 between them. Many companies using
this
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 method for their workers,
for example
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, TQ
company
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have
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has
 different
nationalties
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nationality
nationalities
 workers, and all of them are
worn
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wearing
 a T-shirt carrying TQ logo plus ID card.
Therefore
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,
this
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company
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uniformation
a message received and understood
information
lead
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leads
 to professionalism
in
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at
work
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On the other hand
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, some expertise
think
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thinks
 it is
impartive
requiring attention or action
imperative
 to
foucs
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
 on the quality rather than
employees
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employees'
employee
appearnce
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
opens
abeyance
 for two reasons.
Firstly
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,
high
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higher
qualify
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qualifies
 product means higher reputation among the
competitives
the contestant you hope to defeat
competitors
.
Also
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, many organizations
theseday
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these days
these day
 depend mostly on online
datebase
an organized body of related information
database
databases
such
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 as
NL app-store
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an NL app - store
, so there will be no physical contact between their
employe
a person or firm that employs workers
employer
employee
employees
 and consumer. In my own point view, I think that organizations should be
highly
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highest
high
 qualities in both their
work
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 and workers'
appearnce
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
. Taking Amazon as an example for a
sustinable
capable of being sustained
sustainable
sucssful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
company
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that
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is concentrate
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concentrates
 on the both aspects. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both point views, I believe that organizations should have
sucssful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
work
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 and
acceptal
worthy of acceptance or satisfactory
acceptable
accept al
 employees' dress in order to be
sucss
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successful
success
 in the society.
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