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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem such measures cause?

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There is no doubt that the
meat
 manufacture needs more green spaces than crop manufacture
.
Accept space
.
Therefore
, some people suggest that we should control
meat
 production and replace it by crop. The question is, what are the possible solutions to regulate world’s
meat
 consumptions and what are the consequent problems of
such
 solutions? In
this
 essay, I am going to propose some solutions for
this
 phenomenon and draw some problems associated with the proposed solutions. In terms of solutions, there are
number
Suggestion
a number
 of measures the government can take in order to slow down the
meat
 consumption. One viable way can be by increasing the price of
meat
, which considered the most popular meal for people in general, as well as suppling the supermarkets and shops with fresh foods and vegetables.
Therefore
, the eating habits of people could be changed.
In other words
,
Accept space
,
 the government can add tax fees on the farmers who want to use their farms for
meat
 production.
Consequently
, the cost of
meat
 will rise.
However
, we can’t completely deny that some problems can occur
as a result
 of the mentioned solutions.
For instance
, vegetables and other foods don’t contain the same components as that of the
meat
, so it can result with
lake
the state of needing something that is absent or unavailable
lack
 of some vitamins which are very important for human health.
Accordingly
, people will be forced to intake some supplements to replace these missed ingredients,
however
,
such
 supplements have some side effects if it is not well controlled. In conclusion,
although
 some steps could be taken towards tackling the issue of
meat
 consumption,
this
 might
further
 lead to other issues that should be dealt with
such
 as
potential effects
Suggestion
the potential effects
of
Suggestion
on
 human health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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