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It is said that men are more privileged than women in their work places and in transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#men #women #work #places #transport
It is a
nevear
not ever; at no time in the past or future
never
 ending debate 'whether women are deprived or not'. A number of proponents have drawn their arguments towards men who enjoy more opportunities in the
work places
a place where work is done
workplaces
 and in the transportation than the female counterparts.
However
, I need to be
accord
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accorded
 with the statement as
this
 is the problem of male entitlement society.
To begin
, women have been
experienced
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experiencing
 a lot of discrimination in their daily lives, and they need to compromise frequently. In
corporate environment
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a corporate environment
the corporate environment
,
for example
, the room temperature
were kept
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was kept
 in a way that it is perfectly suitable for male, but the metabolism rate of
woman's body
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a woman's body
the woman's body
, needed to adjust the body temperature, is not equal to the male colleagues. So they need to tolerate an uneven distribution of opportunities in work places than the male but in a competitive profession, which is the result of male dominance.Another type of deprivation
women individuals
Accept comma addition
women, individuals
are facing
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face
 in their daily lives is having
car
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a car
the car
. Having
car
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a car
 is a must for every working
individuals
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individual
, but an
appaling
causing consternation
appalling
 report has shown in the Business Insider that the safety measures were taken to manufacture a car without thinking of women.
Consequently
, if any accident would take place, the women drivers, whose average height
were
Suggestion
was
 less than men's average, would be more affected than the male drivers.
Therefore
, women are at more risk of having cars.To conclude, it is distinctive that not only men are more privileged in their work places than women but
also
 having private cars.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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