It is said that men are more privileged than women in their work places and in transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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It is a

nevear

not ever; at no time in the past or future

never

ending debate 'whether women are deprived or not'. A number of proponents have drawn their arguments towards men who enjoy more opportunities in the

work places

a place where work is done

workplaces

and in the transportation than the female counterparts.

However

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, I need to be

accord

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accorded

with the statement as

this

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is the problem of male entitlement society.

To begin

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, women have been

experienced

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experiencing

a lot of discrimination in their daily lives, and they need to compromise frequently. In

corporate environment

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a corporate environment

the corporate environment

for example

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, the room temperature

were kept

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was kept

in a way that it is perfectly suitable for male, but the metabolism rate of

woman's body

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a woman's body

the woman's body

, needed to adjust the body temperature, is not equal to the male colleagues. So they need to tolerate an uneven distribution of opportunities in work places than the male but in a competitive profession, which is the result of male dominance.Another type of deprivation

women individuals

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women, individuals

are facing

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face

in their daily lives is having

car

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a car

the car

. Having

car

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a car

is a must for every working

individuals

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individual

, but an

appaling

causing consternation

appalling

report has shown in the Business Insider that the safety measures were taken to manufacture a car without thinking of women.

Consequently

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, if any accident would take place, the women drivers, whose average height

were

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was

less than men's average, would be more affected than the male drivers.

Therefore

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, women are at more risk of having cars.To conclude, it is distinctive that not only men are more privileged in their work places than women but

also

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having private cars.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

247 words

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